Celebrating a Year

week 99 ~ an interesting change

with 40 comments

an interesting change
in the light here today
clouds drift and rearrange
and old ideas won’t stay

in the light here today
I read my discontent
and old ideas won’t stay
my happiness is spent

I read my discontent
in every passing breeze
my happiness is spent
its got me on my knees

in every passing breeze
my dreams sing azure blue
its got me on my knees
and I hope to slide through

my dreams sing azure blue
clouds drift and rearrange
and I hope to slide through
an interesting change

Written by mairmusic

September 9, 2010 at 4:18 pm

40 Responses

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  1. Yay! pantoum! I was just about to write one! Wicked…. someone on my group introduced me to the form.. seems very rare, not much information to be found on them. I notice you go with six syllables per line, which pretty much makes it trimeter (tho’ I see it isn’t iambic all thru). Is that a prerequisite? (The six syllables, and/or trimeter). Smooth poem you got there too, you would know it had such restrictions… (aah I love that). Thanks you for the award truly, here it is:

    http://lukepraterswordsalad.wordpress.com/about/community-blog-awards/

    Warmest Salad

    Luke

    Luke Prater

    September 9, 2010 at 4:46 pm

    • hey Luke– it’s a pretty new form to me– just wrote one other. I know the repetition scheme is mandatory, but don’t think there’s a particular line length, and some sources say it doesn’t even have to rhyme.

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 5:33 pm

  2. ps… which widget did you use so someone can search by poem type down the R hand side?

    Luke Prater

    September 9, 2010 at 4:47 pm

    • I wrote that info before– I think in answer to your question on the Beauty of Reflection award post.

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 5:34 pm

  3. Really enjoyed your poem…as I read it aloud…I just loved the way it flowed…thanks for sharing.

    slpmartin

    September 9, 2010 at 4:51 pm

    • Thanks– it;s a new form for me and quite intriguing!

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 5:11 pm

  4. my dreams sing azure blue
    clouds drift and rearrange
    and I hope to slide through
    an interesting change….

    love it absolutely,
    you can do it if you push yourself a little bit,
    Thanks for the unique contribution!
    you are a sunshine!

    Jingle

    September 9, 2010 at 5:34 pm

    • Thank you, Jingle! Happy that I made it in time for the Rally!

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 5:36 pm

  5. the style is very fabulous,
    love the rhymes and the repetitions…

    unbeatable poem,
    hope that it is a fiction.

    your long time support and beautiful contribution is valued and appreciated.
    Happy Thursday!
    Have fun!

    Jingle

    September 9, 2010 at 5:36 pm

    • No, not entirely fiction, there is truly a change in the air, I can feel it. Glad you liked the poem

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 5:47 pm

  6. what a beautiful poem about embracing change… this is lovely, mairmusic!

    PinkLady

    September 9, 2010 at 6:50 pm

    • Thanks so much for reading!

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 7:22 pm

  7. nice love how you tie the poem to the visual with the right wonderful

    THE BEATY

    September 9, 2010 at 8:56 pm

    • Thanks for your comments!

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 10:40 pm

  8. I have never tried the pantoum…not that easy, I loved the wordplay in this Marilynn. Beautifully expressed and such an interesting image. Loved it!! xxx

    buttercup600

    September 9, 2010 at 9:19 pm

    • Thanks Ms Amanda– this is my 2nd pantoum– it’s interesting work to guide the flow of the poem with the repetition required by the form.

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 10:43 pm

  9. Thank you so much for this wonderful work..

    Happy Rally…

    Sweet Dish

    –Someone Is Special–

    Someone Is Special

    September 9, 2010 at 10:31 pm

    • Thanks for your comment!

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 10:43 pm

  10. This is so lovely. I really like this pantoum. I love the form, but it doesn’t always come so easily for me.

    Morganna

    September 9, 2010 at 10:36 pm

    • This is my 2nd one– it’s a curious puzzle to manage but so far I’m enjoying it.

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 10:52 pm

  11. This is brilliant. The image suits your prose so well. Great piece.

    Madison

    September 9, 2010 at 10:43 pm

    • Thanks for reading– I appreciate your comment.

      mairmusic

      September 9, 2010 at 10:53 pm

  12. Like your music, it fills the air with enchanting words, that when said out loud, sound like musical notes to my ear.

    Change is in the air… what ever it is I truly hope it is your hearts desire being sent to you on angels wings, but selfishly I hope you continue to blog.

    Cheers,
    Joanny

    joanny

    September 9, 2010 at 11:58 pm

    • very sweet of you to say! On my birthday it’ll be 2 years of this blog. When I began I couldn’t imagine doing this every day for a year– it was a challenge to myself. Now I can’t imagine stopping.

      mairmusic

      September 10, 2010 at 9:34 am

  13. wow.. this works fantastic :D what a nice form, i can’t wait to try it :D
    love the image as well :)

    mine for the Rally is at
    ~~this post~~

    Leo (Leonnyes)

    September 10, 2010 at 4:24 am

    • Thanks! I’ll be right over.

      mairmusic

      September 10, 2010 at 9:34 am

  14. I know how difficult it is to write a good pantoum – most of mine finish as wildly torn-up scraps of paper! You have succeeded admirably, in that you have subtly disguised the repetitions to make a poem that flows. FĂ©licitations.

    vivinfrance

    September 10, 2010 at 4:41 am

    • Well thank you so much– praise from a pantoumista! This is only my 2nd but I already am falling for the form. The necessity of the repetition creates a puzzle. I find I spend alot of time tweaking the lines after I’ve done a rough draft to make the fit more seamless. This one originally had another verse in the middle– I made 3 into 2– and had some specific lines about Brazil and Portuguese that slid from the poem because they were too noticeable when repeated and distracted from the flow. Have you got one on your site I could read?

      mairmusic

      September 10, 2010 at 9:40 am

      • One of these days, when I stick the scraps together and have another go!

        vivinfrance

        September 10, 2010 at 10:14 am

      • Well the form IS a puzzle!

        mairmusic

        September 10, 2010 at 10:45 am

  15. great poem. simply fabulous. just loved the poem.

    Trisha

    September 10, 2010 at 9:30 am

    • Thanks, Trisha!

      mairmusic

      September 10, 2010 at 9:40 am

  16. It has such great movement and added to the meaning that I drew from the poem. I really liked it!

    tasithoughts

    September 10, 2010 at 10:39 am

    • Thanks so much! I guess as a musician the flow is important to me.

      mairmusic

      September 10, 2010 at 10:45 am

  17. Pantoum? I like the way you experiment with different forms … and you always pull it off. Admirable. And this one is fine work. Appreciate the sentiment and another fabulous catch with the photo.

    Jamie Dedes

    September 12, 2010 at 9:09 am

    • Thanks, Jamie! It’s a new form for me but an interesting puzzle to solve as it unfolds.

      mairmusic

      September 13, 2010 at 8:40 am

  18. Happy monday, are you done?
    Please let me know…
    Thanks for sharing!
    :)

    Jingle

    September 13, 2010 at 4:22 am

    • No, not yet– I will finish today.

      mairmusic

      September 13, 2010 at 8:40 am

  19. And a VERY interesting poem!!
    Cloud patterns change, so do dreams..and so does the walk of life…
    But we manage pretty well, don’t we?! :)

    Beautifully said in this poem!!!

    Good luck with everything, M
    Verse on… and I will sing it in my mind…

    Kavita

    September 13, 2010 at 2:54 pm

    • Happy singing!

      mairmusic

      September 13, 2010 at 3:23 pm


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