Celebrating a Year

week 249 ~ the rustle of aspen leaves

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me.249the rustle of aspen leaves
a sanctuary of peace
unravel old time’s rent sleeve
and savor the sweet release

a sanctuary of peace
so laugh throw away the key
and savor the sweet release
when there’s nothing left to be

so laugh throw away the key
there’s no need to lock the door
when there’s nothing left to be
you require nothing more

there’s no need to lock the door
as your demons disappear
you require nothing more
what you’re searching for is here

as your demons disappear
unravel old time’s rent sleeve
what you’re searching for is here
the rustle of aspen leaves

Written by mairmusic

July 22, 2013 at 2:18 pm

Posted in July, pantoum

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  1. A most delightful verse…full of relaxation.

    slpmartin

    July 22, 2013 at 6:22 pm

  2. what you are searching for is right here…
    something that takes a bit of learning…love the leaf rustle too…
    a peaceful verse, with a nice dance of repetition…

    brian miller

    July 23, 2013 at 4:42 pm

  3. A wannabe Brasileira? Onde voce mora? Sou Americano que mora no estado do Rio de Janeiro…best of luck! ~peace, Jason

    lovemorestudio

    July 23, 2013 at 9:44 pm

  4. I’ve seen that form before. I couldn’t remember that it was a pantoum, but I liked the graceful flow. Thanks,

    Waltermarks

    July 23, 2013 at 10:29 pm

    • I discovered it from an online writing friend. It’s fun to play with the repetition yet transformation of the lines.

      mairmusic

      July 24, 2013 at 12:03 am

  5. I have enjoyed reading this poem, especially the lyrical rhythm and playful repetition.

  6. Well done, great topic and content for the form.

    SSMatthews

    July 24, 2013 at 9:13 am

  7. freedom…bliss…peace

    KATiE MiA FredericK!

    July 24, 2013 at 6:46 pm

  8. A graceful poem full of peace. Lovely!

    Jamie Dedes

    July 28, 2013 at 2:24 am

    • Thanks, my friend. Written on the island by hand complete with cross-outs and all the edits I sometimes forget about when writing on a computer. But I had to capture the feeling.

      mairmusic

      July 28, 2013 at 10:54 am


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