Celebrating a Year

week 97 ~ like high tide in Tucson

with 52 comments

like high tide in Tucson
instinct trumps geography
and landlocked or long gone
like high tide in Tucson
it’s time to put my shoes on
as autumn reaches back for me
like high tide in Tucson
instinct trumps geography

My rondeau is based on the true tale of a hermit crab, accidentally transported to landlocked Tucson, who maintained his frenetic dance for high tide, a memory embedded too deeply to be lost although rendered pointless by his relocation. Barbara Kingsolver wrote an essay on this and the concept intrigues me as it pertains to habits and schedules imprinted so indelibly they draw us back to what we would leave behind.

Written by mairmusic

August 26, 2010 at 4:39 pm

52 Responses

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  1. welcome back…
    I am thrilled to see you in,
    missed u in the week,
    Happy Rally!
    :)

    Jingle

    August 26, 2010 at 5:24 pm

    • Thanks Jingle– Happy to be back in time for the Rally!

      mairmusic

      August 26, 2010 at 7:09 pm

  2. ready for change,
    cool attitude,
    compact and divine piece.
    love the style!
    :)

    way to go!

    Jingle

    August 26, 2010 at 5:24 pm

    • Thanks, as always, for your support!

      mairmusic

      August 26, 2010 at 7:10 pm

  3. Packing my bags for Tuscan!

    carolina

    August 26, 2010 at 8:19 pm

    • It’s a metaphor– just posted the explanation under the poem. I have actually never been to Tuscon…

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 3:11 pm

  4. Cool attitude, cool picture.
    vivid and soothing :)

    keep rolling
    viva la vida :)

    Anky0112

    August 26, 2010 at 8:37 pm

    • hey– thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 3:07 pm

  5. Ahaaa… I see you are having an awesome time, Marilynn!!! Great to see that!
    And it showed through your words…
    Yea, reading this is making me wanna step out, and take a walk by the Hudson.. yaaayyy… WELCOME AUTUMN!!!! :D

    Kavita

    August 26, 2010 at 9:46 pm

    • Yep– it was a good break for me– thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 3:04 pm

  6. Awesomeness…just like YOU!!! xx

    buttercup600

    August 26, 2010 at 10:21 pm

    • Glad for your reading!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 2:56 pm

  7. I like this form and the poem you have created.

    Morganna

    August 26, 2010 at 10:31 pm

    • Thanks, Morganna!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 2:54 pm

  8. I loved all the sound repetition. Especially the alliteration. It made the whole piece roll along smoothly :)

    laurenmichelleotheim

    August 27, 2010 at 6:20 am

    • Thanks, Lauren!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 2:52 pm

  9. Repetitions are a good thing when used well, and despite the brevity of this poem, that repetition was music to the poem. It set the mood and though i don’t know what high tide in Tucson is like, this poem allows the mystery of that to set the mood.

    83October

    August 27, 2010 at 9:11 am

    • I just added an explanation, since the concept is somewhat inscrutable. Thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 2:47 pm

  10. I love the powerful pull of forces at play embedded in this piece.

    tasithoughts

    August 27, 2010 at 6:35 pm

    • Thanks– I appreciate you reading.

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 8:09 pm

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    pick three awards from my post,
    pass them to 1 to 10 blogging friends with whom you believe that they deserve them.
    have fun!
    Take good care.

    Jingle

    August 27, 2010 at 6:46 pm

    • thanks, Jingle!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 8:10 pm

  12. I like this. The form and focus work so well together. The repeating line is like something imprinted in our habits. – Bill

    revbillcook

    August 27, 2010 at 6:51 pm

    • Thanks– perfect!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 8:11 pm

  13. Cool and vivid, thank you!

    vacuousverse

    August 27, 2010 at 7:42 pm

    • Thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      August 27, 2010 at 8:11 pm

  14. Fantastic.
    I do like your style

    Artswebshow

    August 27, 2010 at 8:48 pm

    • Thanks for visiting!

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 7:07 am

  15. May the beauty of the coming Autumn serve you well and fill you up……. Lovely poem and loved the little explanation after… have read a couple of her books and loved them. :) Heartspell

    heartspell

    August 27, 2010 at 10:16 pm

    • I have nominated you for The Perfect Poet Award. I enjoy reading your blog… Congratulations! heartspell

      heartspell

      August 27, 2010 at 11:20 pm

      • Well thanks so much! My blog is a part of me that doesn’t factor into the rest of my life, and I am happy to have found a resting place for my words and photos.

        mairmusic

        August 28, 2010 at 7:28 am

    • Thanks! I added the foot note because the reference seemed to be unclear to most readers. Happy autumn to you as well!

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 7:19 am

  16. I love the way you took the subject that inspired you – a crab returning home – and wrote your poem in a circular fashion; the beginning became the end and the end the beginning…
    Without sounding over-sentimental, you used the universal needs we all have, even crabs, and you didn’t try to make a crab think like a person, as some would. This was lovely and peaceful; it read like a long haiku.

    brokenpenwriter

    August 27, 2010 at 10:49 pm

    • Thanks! I didn’t even think of the crab connection built into the rondeau form, so go to the head of the class :-) It’s the shortest form I write, so it’s the closest I approach a haiku.

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 7:22 am

  17. No matter where I may roam, I think I will always change seasons, if only in my mind. I enjoyed this read…Thank You.

    tracyhsays

    August 28, 2010 at 1:00 am

    • Thanks for reading, Tracy!

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 7:28 am

  18. a very beautiful Rondeau :) the repetition is key in it. liked it.

    my entry for the rally is The Butterfly Lover :)

    Leo (Leonnyes)

    August 28, 2010 at 1:48 am

    • Just flitted over to read you… thanks for your comments!

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 7:32 am

  19. This was a special read, and thank you for the explanation. Everything on this planet is being rearranged and reshuffled.
    It also brought up memories of horse shoe crabs back east on the beach, they were there for centuries prehistoric actually and the youth coming in the 70’s were killing them for the sport, so sad.

    Joanny

    joanny

    August 28, 2010 at 2:35 am

    • Nature is so important for renewal, it’s a shame when folks waste it. Thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 7:33 am

  20. lovely poem as always :)

    oinky

    August 28, 2010 at 6:55 am

    • Thanks for stopping by!

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 7:34 am

  21. Beautiful piece, mairmusic :)
    I think I’ve read the Kingsolver book you talked about, it’s very inspiring :)

    Imagina

    August 28, 2010 at 11:32 am

    • Thanks for commenting– happy autumn!

      mairmusic

      August 28, 2010 at 11:34 am

  22. I like Kingsolver … Went to a talk she gave not too long ago. Attended with my daughter-in-law … double the pleasure.

    This is the most completely charming post! I love it …

    Jamie Dedes

    August 28, 2010 at 10:05 pm

    • She is a big fave of mine. This book of essays is like having the best of conversations. Glad you like the rondeau– thanks!

      mairmusic

      August 29, 2010 at 9:56 am

  23. I love the images and echoes of a time long past in this piece.

    PattiKen

    August 29, 2010 at 10:36 am

    • Thanks for reading, Patti!

      mairmusic

      August 29, 2010 at 11:00 am

  24. hi Marilyn – as I’ve been wanting to try a rondeau for ages, I’ve been researching the form… both on the internet and also in my Oxford Dictionary of Lit Terms… I like the simple eight-liner you practice, but it isn’t a rondeau; it’s a triolet, also considered a simplified version of a rondel (which is quite different to a rondeau). Triolet, rondel, rondeau and roundel are all different, and even the rondeau has a shorter and longer (v complex) form. The normal rondeau is 13 lines long and has three rhymes, the C rhyme being a refrain (R) which is the first half of the first line. ie.

    a-a-b-b-a | a-a-b-R | a-a-b-b-a-R (all lines having eight syllables except the R (refrain lines) which have four, being half the first line).

    Thought you might like to know, as it is damn confusing with all the dorms being so similar in name etc, but yours are triolets I’m pretty sure. Lovely form though, I will write one; you do it well.

    All the best

    Luke

    Luke Prater

    August 30, 2010 at 8:45 am

    • Thanks, Luke, for sharing your research :-) The rondeau I am writing is a French musical & poetic form from ~1300. There can be anywhere from 8-21 lines, and there are 2 lines of music to go w/ the different rhymes. There’s an example of Guillame de Mauchaut & a good explanation at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FHjWbgRZSrQ . A brief quote, “The most commonly used form is ABaAabAB, where capital letters refer to repetition of the (two-part) refrain text and music while lowercase letters refer to repetition of music alone with a new text.” That is the form I write.

      Later generations sub-categorized the rondeau with different names for each variation of length, so mine can be called triolet, as I write in the right-hand column. But the songs are still called rondeau, and I and many friends have been writing these 8-line treasures as rondeau for decades, whether they were sung or not. A medieval group I knew even had a “rondeau bell” at their concerts and anyone could come up & ring the bell and recite their original rondeau. So mine will remain rondeau, though the Oxford dictionary disagrees. But most sources recognize that the 2-rhyme pattern, repeated lines & the unrhymed couplet to begin & end show a family resemblance regardless of length. looking forward to reading yours!

      mairmusic

      August 30, 2010 at 9:27 am

  25. fantastic poem. your talent is awesome. i am simply bowled over by your grip on so many styles. am reading your poems category-wise now.

    Trisha

    September 22, 2010 at 11:55 pm

    • Thanks, Trisha! What a sweet compliment! Let me know which ones you like. I love poetic forms. As I have said before, I write in formal structures so I have a set point when I know I have to stop. :-)

      mairmusic

      September 23, 2010 at 12:00 am


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