week 94 ~ in a country beyond dreaming
in a country beyond dreaming
I awake with sleepy pleasure
believing that I’ve found treasure
in a plot too strange for scheming
I don’t look for hidden meaning
all bets are off I’m lost or free
or one with everything I see
it just depends on point of view
for I’ve stashed all that I once knew
between regret and memory
Excellent. I really like flow and rhythm of this. And you are so right. The lines between dream and reality, freedom and imprisonment, loss and gain, regret and perhaps pride, are often drawn by one’s point of view.
pattiken
August 4, 2010 at 11:26 am
Thanks for your insightful & supportive comment!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 11:45 am
What a great place to be at MM. such a sweet reverie
Katherine
August 4, 2010 at 11:53 am
thanks it’s kindof about my new life in Brazil…
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 11:56 am
there is a fine line between the two somedays…intrigued…time in brazil…if there a post you can refer us to about that?
thanks for linking up again…i put your link on the oneshot page for this week..
brian
August 4, 2010 at 12:29 pm
Yep, but waiting until the new music page is launched. I kept logs w/ pics while I was there. & poems the first visit in 2007– some of my “Rio sonnets”. Thanks for putting me in the right place…
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 12:57 pm
Love this – “between regret and memory.” Thanks for posting this.
Glynn
August 4, 2010 at 2:27 pm
Thank YOU for reading!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 2:31 pm
I know this was not what the poem was supposed to mean, but the moment I read it, I was reminded of Las Vegas! :)
But then, just as you’ve mentioned in the poem, it’s all about perception and perspective…
A lovely poem, Marilynn.. From your tags, I figured that this type is called ‘decima’… I really enjoy these tidbits of information that you give via your poems.. and am actually saving them in my own personal file (for reference)…
Thank you so much for sharing such a lovely and uplifting poem of possible hope…
Kavita
August 4, 2010 at 3:00 pm
You are so welcome. And, yes, it could be Los Vegas for you– not for me for I’ve never been. I do love the decima form…
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 3:15 pm
it is all perspective, isn’t it? thanks for reading!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 3:17 pm
like the balances in your poem – between regret and memory – depending on the point of view..
Claudia
August 4, 2010 at 3:10 pm
hi M,
i really need to get this decima thing on… so jealous. :)
this piece got me thinking about my own past. Which bin would be more filled? regret or memory? the difference between what you have done and what you wish you had.
Doni Cifra
August 4, 2010 at 3:40 pm
Do it! I’m lovin’ the different interpretations of this poem that are coming in…
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 4:14 pm
Ah, a fan of poetic form! That’s so nice to see – so rare. I enjoy the villanelle and the sestina and the triolet. The decima is nice too. I still have a few that I have yet to toy with. I would love a visit from you, but must warn that the latest offerings are nothing special – go back a bit. I’ve just released a book of poems and I have included some of the forms you favour.
The colloquial, “All bets are off” reminds me so much of my own writing.
Kat
Poetikat
August 4, 2010 at 3:52 pm
You can read my poems by form. The 1 year was all sonnets, but the other forms have 10 or 12 each by now.
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 4:16 pm
Nice work! I really dig that rhyming scheme.
Eric Alder
August 4, 2010 at 3:58 pm
Thanks, I’m on a kindof crusade to bring the decima into English!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 4:16 pm
Guess that makes you a decimista… enjoyed this poem. Reminds me of the mental treasure of one’s awareness, being, and possibilities maybe once not perceived or stifled. Thanks :)
dustus
August 4, 2010 at 5:19 pm
Yep– and one of the few in English! Thanks for reading!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 6:27 pm
i really enjoyed this..maybe i am off the track but it reminded me of being away and loving that place and wanting to remain but knowing that to be there permanently would destroy its beauty as it becomes just another place…thanks for sharing with One Shot..cheers pete
pete marshall
August 4, 2010 at 5:28 pm
Boy are you so on– that’s exactly the way I feel about Rio, and that’s not even what I was consciously writing. V.cool!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 6:28 pm
top marks to me then….cheers, jusr reread it and it is still so very fresh..thanks Pete
pete marshall
August 5, 2010 at 7:48 am
yep– head of the class ;-)
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 8:36 am
Following the Prompt as usual with the message remaining outstanding. It is obvious you are having the time of your life…I wish you the best in it.
Cheers.
Emmanuel Ibok
August 4, 2010 at 6:04 pm
Thanks, querido– happy just to be! But not sure what you mean by “prompt” It’s just my own brain prompting me to write the weekly poem :-)
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 6:30 pm
I love this flow, spectacular writing! ( I probably search for meaning, more often than not…. :) however I look for the better meaning usually) Excellent! :) ~April
betweenhearts75
August 4, 2010 at 7:23 pm
Thanks– I appreciate you reading!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 7:37 pm
The first line and the last line – those lines alone spoke volumes! that’s a place I’ve visited a few times.
Talon
August 4, 2010 at 8:14 pm
Thanks! I appreciate your comment!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 9:06 pm
I absolutely loved the flow of this poem, you have done that to perfection!! I join you in this one!! Awesome writing my friend xx
buttercup600
August 4, 2010 at 9:00 pm
Thanks so much– & right back attya!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 9:07 pm
I loved this! Not looking for hidden meaning…. depends on point of view…. stashed all I once knew between regret and memory…
wonderful words here… very thoughtful piece, like a conversation with oneself…very nice. Thank you for sharing.
heartspell
August 4, 2010 at 9:33 pm
& thank YOU for reading!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 10:12 pm
Also, lovely photo of you… you look so happy… your instrument
like an external heart. Heartspell
heartspell
August 4, 2010 at 9:35 pm
Wow– nice observation– thanks!
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 10:13 pm
lyrics
:-)
nance nAncY nanc heyyou davisbaby
August 4, 2010 at 10:03 pm
?? Well, actually, the Cuban decima IS sung.
mairmusic
August 4, 2010 at 10:14 pm
great write mair with much to ponder— love the line do not believe I am one with everything I see…so much in few words….nice read…bkm
soulintention: signed .............bkm
August 4, 2010 at 11:20 pm
thanks! I’m interested how these lines have been interpreted in so many personal ways…
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 7:28 am
you may not be looking for hidden meaning but in the land of dreaming it can sneak up on you.
it really is a sweet song you have played for us
Thanks for playing it for One Shot Poetry
humming along from the moon
moondustwriter
August 5, 2010 at 1:38 am
Thanks for reading– I love the poetry @ One Shot!
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 7:29 am
awesome !!! loved it :) wish i had the power to do this !
ladynimue
August 5, 2010 at 8:20 am
and I wish I could write haiku like you– it would be boring if we were all he same.
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 8:38 am
this flowed like a gentle stream.
thank you so much for visiting and commenting. please come often.
smiles,
jessie
August 5, 2010 at 8:45 am
thanks for reading!
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 8:47 am
Beautiful Beautiful lines…came via onestop and glad i stoped by.
Wild Rose~
Julliette O (Larvk)
August 5, 2010 at 12:09 pm
Thanks for reading! stop back any time!
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 1:22 pm
Thank you for the comment on my “Gold on Film” post the one i shared with one-stop was this one. Hope you will like it better, i know we all have different views of life and relationships i write in a wide range as well :)
http://shahlarveek.blogspot.com/2010/06/feminine-intent.html
Wild Rose~
Julliette O (Larvk)
August 5, 2010 at 2:59 pm
The title of the post for one-stop is called Feminine Intent you just need to scroll down the link i gave you above :)
Wild Rose~
Julliette O (Larvk)
August 5, 2010 at 3:00 pm
“in a plot too strange for scheming”
indeed, some truly are! :)
L.L. Barkat
August 5, 2010 at 3:47 pm
Yep, some are just you-could-not-make-this-up!
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 3:48 pm
very well written, superb post :)
william
August 5, 2010 at 4:52 pm
Thanks Sir William! I appreciate you reading!
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 6:04 pm
ahaaa..that is a strike here! amazing write..powerful and i am so glad i stopped by to read this masterpiece! so deep and made me think,then i smiled..:) BRAVO!
GLAD YOU LINKED TO ONE STOP..thanks for sharing this beauty..:)
Desert rose
August 5, 2010 at 6:00 pm
Thanks for reading! i’m glad to be @ One Stop too– lots of great writers!
mairmusic
August 5, 2010 at 6:04 pm
Strangely I’m reading this as I listen to Contemporary Flamenco( as you do) and I can feel this sang with intense but contained passion guiding a beat. See how the words could fit into this tune!
http://www.last.fm/music/Rodrigo+y+Gabriela/_/Juan+Loco
Thanks for dropping by and reading Campaigning. I’m drawn to poetry as a storytelling technique and this was about the life of a woman emptied out by the political ambitions of her husband.
Me a writer?
August 7, 2010 at 4:19 am
It’s interesting how folks think this decima should be sung! The form went from poem to song in Cuba in the early 20th century. But none of my other decimas on this blog elicited that response. Why?
mairmusic
August 7, 2010 at 8:37 am
What cadence. Very fine work … and accompanied by your (I assume) sparkling smile. Nice!
Jamie Dedes
August 8, 2010 at 10:59 pm
Thanks! Yep– one of my blog sets is a pic of myself every week, to get over camera fear…
mairmusic
August 9, 2010 at 12:10 am
a very blissful country it is for sure.
Trisha
October 10, 2010 at 9:31 am
Ah, yes– I’d love to be there now!
mairmusic
October 11, 2010 at 1:14 am