Celebrating a Year

week 93 ~ some moments were never meant to last

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some moments were never meant to last
watch as the streamers slip from your hand
and so the present becomes the past

all the balloons sail away too fast
while you’re stuck trying to understand
some moments were never meant to last

everyone says when more time has passed
you’ll realize your life’s not an island
and so the present becomes the past

and the future still can’t be forecast
but you’re no longer stuck in quicksand
some moments were never meant to last

push off from the shore it’s time to cast
a net for those tomorrows unplanned
and so the present becomes the past

as you find without warning those vast
oceans of promise can still expand
some moments were never meant to last
and so the present becomes the past

Written by mairmusic

July 28, 2010 at 8:45 pm

Posted in July, villanelle

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  1. there is a great scheme to your poem…lots of repitition…which drives home…this moment that passed.

    brian

    July 28, 2010 at 9:14 pm

    • thanks! it’s the villanelle form– wonderfully obsessive!

      mairmusic

      July 28, 2010 at 9:41 pm

  2. I love the repetition and how well-constructed it is, the last stanza summed it up so beautifully!! I enjoy your writing and the sincerity with which you explore. Awesome poem xxx

    buttercup600

    July 28, 2010 at 10:48 pm

    • Thanks– this blog is my chance to shake my world up a bit and see what comes out. 93 weeks & still interesting…

      mairmusic

      July 28, 2010 at 11:03 pm

  3. Wow… the content was true to the core!!
    How quickly the present turns to past, one just doesn’t realize…
    I really enjoyed the way you’ve constructed this poem… the well-timed repetitions, the rhymes… it was just too good put together!!! A lovely piece !

    Kavita

    July 29, 2010 at 12:35 am

    • Thanks! I’m still trying out the villanelle form & its repetitions. It can be sing-songy if one isn’t careful. This is the first one i’ve written w/ a 9-syllable line.

      mairmusic

      July 29, 2010 at 8:28 am

  4. Another great villanelle my friend! You write these well. I wish I had your tenacity with them. Guess what? Inspired by you, I just wrote my first decimá… it the latest post on my blog. Thought you might like to see it (they’re so rare, they’re not even listed in my dictionary of Lit terms! Crazy). On the Facebook Poetry Circle I admin, we had a bit of a decimá-fest, everyone gave it a go… was lots of fun.

    Cheers

    Luke

    Luke Prater

    July 30, 2010 at 5:12 pm

    • V.cool! I do wish Facebook would let outsiders in to look. But I still value privacy over membership.

      mairmusic

      July 30, 2010 at 5:30 pm

  5. True words. I like the way you always follow the prompt. Hope you’re doing good. Nice to be here.

    Cheers!

    Emmanuel Ibok

    July 31, 2010 at 8:18 pm

    • Thanks1 I’m fine, if a little blue. Hope all goes well for you!

      mairmusic

      July 31, 2010 at 9:24 pm

  6. you see things in depth at some point.
    well done!
    ;)

    Jingle

    July 31, 2010 at 9:56 pm

    • Thanks so much for your friendship!

      mairmusic

      August 1, 2010 at 10:37 am

  7. A finely wrought poem . . . the choice of poetic structure certainly helps get the message across . . . Well done, Marilyn. :-)

    Jamie Dedes

    August 2, 2010 at 10:23 am

    • Thanks for reading. I have come to love the villanelle.

      mairmusic

      August 2, 2010 at 10:38 am

  8. I come here for the joy of reading what you write, and the joy never fails. The education I get is just icing on the cake…I will, after all is said and done, try my hand at these forms you are so adept at. Thank you for all…

    Tracy H

    tracyhsays

    August 7, 2010 at 7:46 am

    • You are v.sweet– thanks! It’s lovely to be read and appreciated.

      mairmusic

      August 7, 2010 at 8:39 am


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