Celebrating a Year

week 81 ~ as if writing was something that happened

with 29 comments

as if writing was something that happened
to me
like an act of truth or sunlight
on the wall or a moment when I might
find all the words I’ve ever imagined
floating onto a page unbidden take
off the clothes my thoughts have been taught to wear
by men who know more than me so I’ll dare
succeed or fail or wobble as I make
an attempt to say what I feel without
thinking about what I feel
without in-
tellect intervening as I begin
to see a place with no room left for doubt
where I’ll unpack myself understanding
that somehow this could be the one real thing

The words in italics are quotes from Fernando Pessoa’s “One Way or Another,” written in 1914.

Written by mairmusic

May 5, 2010 at 2:23 pm

Posted in May, sonnet

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  1. very nice!

    Ji

    May 5, 2010 at 3:09 pm

    • thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      May 5, 2010 at 3:21 pm

  2. nicely done…writing is so many things…sometimes untangling knots…sometimes bleeding it out…sometimes a smile….keep writing..smiles.

    brian

    May 5, 2010 at 6:03 pm

    • Thanks for reading, and I always appreciate your insights.

      mairmusic

      May 5, 2010 at 6:39 pm

  3. this is really well written.
    great job

    Artswebshow

    May 5, 2010 at 7:15 pm

    • thanks for reading! and I appreciate your opinion.

      mairmusic

      May 5, 2010 at 7:18 pm

  4. Very interesting. There was a cadence and rhythm i found leant weight to the words. I look forward to reading more.

    Ray

    May 5, 2010 at 7:39 pm

    • thanks so much! looking forward to reading you!

      mairmusic

      May 5, 2010 at 7:45 pm

  5. I can’t think of a better way to pay tribute to a modernist than to incorporate his words into your own. Nicely done.

    mudwords

    May 6, 2010 at 12:08 pm

    • hey– thanks! I love Pessoa’s work w/ a passion. & he actually wrote some English sonnets, so I though it was fun to put his early free verse into a sonnet of my own.

      mairmusic

      May 6, 2010 at 12:23 pm

  6. Very nice fast paced rhythm – and meaningful to boot!
    Thanks!

    BFG

    May 6, 2010 at 3:50 pm

    • thank YOU for reading!

      mairmusic

      May 6, 2010 at 4:08 pm

      • An excellent job at trying to get to the heart of writing.

        anthonynorth

        May 6, 2010 at 5:06 pm

      • thanks! we all do ;-)

        mairmusic

        May 6, 2010 at 5:07 pm

  7. I like the fact that you like and dare to write in different forms…
    I like this …how you managed to incorporate Pessoa’s quotes into your poetry which is not easy but very inspiring , indeed.
    Well done!
    you may visit me here
    hugs
    shakira

    shakira

    May 6, 2010 at 8:21 pm

  8. take
    off the clothes my thoughts have been taught to wear – love that line!

    suzicate

    May 6, 2010 at 8:46 pm

    • Thanks for reading– I appreciate your comments!

      mairmusic

      May 6, 2010 at 8:51 pm

  9. I really enjoyed your poem! I found the first four lines interesting and thought it was quite creative how you incorporated quotes within the poem.

    poetryoftheasian

    May 6, 2010 at 9:44 pm

    • Thanks for reading & I appreciate your comments!

      mairmusic

      May 6, 2010 at 10:50 pm

    • this is last week’s poem. My new one is up now…

      mairmusic

      May 12, 2010 at 2:09 pm

  10. I really related to this. Very nice!

    navytaximan

    May 16, 2010 at 3:49 pm

    • glad it resonated– thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      May 16, 2010 at 6:27 pm

  11. I really enjoy the remix/reinterpretation of the poem! You definitely paid homage while adding your own voice. Great job!

    Mike

    June 4, 2010 at 10:26 am

    • Thanks so much, Mike– and thanks for reading so far back! Do you know Pessoa? Highly recommended!

      mairmusic

      June 4, 2010 at 11:03 am

      • I can’t say I’m familiar with his works. But I found a book on Google Books and plan on reading through it. I really liked the poem quoted in your poem here, so I’ll keep on browsing. Thanks!

        Mike

        June 4, 2010 at 11:04 am

      • He’s astonishing. The book I have is The Poems of Fernando Pessoa, translated by my mentor Edwin Honig (brilliant poet in his own right), and published by City Lights in 1998.

        mairmusic

        June 4, 2010 at 11:07 am


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