Celebrating a Year

week 79 ~ though not for lack of trying

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though not for lack of trying
I have yet to find a chance
to unlock my door for spring
and winter’s still denying
it’s become a backward glance

though not for lack of trying
I still don’t know what to bring
or what’s needed for this dance
to unlock my door for spring
when will what I’m offering
be sufficient to advance

though not for lack of trying
each day finds me still waiting
patiently by the entrance
to unlock my door for spring
so tell me what is missing
my heart hangs in the balance
though not for lack of trying
to unlock my door for spring

Written by mairmusic

April 21, 2010 at 7:30 pm

Posted in April, villanelle

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18 Responses

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  1. tight verse…spring has sprung here and my door is wide open…i hope you find the key that will unlock that door for you. smiles.

    brian

    April 21, 2010 at 7:46 pm

    • Thanks! all is good!

      mairmusic

      April 21, 2010 at 7:50 pm

  2. awesome,

    spring sings near your door,
    open it,
    you will have it sooner than you think!
    ;)

    Ji

    April 21, 2010 at 8:26 pm

  3. Nice poem. Some nice variation on a Villanelle.

    Arambler

    April 21, 2010 at 8:33 pm

  4. i like it! :) open your door and embrace spring :) for he awaits your presence :D

    oinky

    April 22, 2010 at 12:52 am

  5. Time brings spring, Time solves it all so just take a deep breathe and let time take you there. I like the heading. “though not for lack of trying.”

    Emmanuel Ibok

    April 22, 2010 at 2:18 am

  6. I can feel your hope for Spring.
    Lovely verses.
    Happy Thursday!
    Mine is here
    hugs
    shakira

    shakira

    April 22, 2010 at 3:50 am

  7. simply fantastic.
    it will come when the right time comes.

    trisha

    April 22, 2010 at 2:04 pm

  8. Lovely
    Thanks for the visit and the invite over.
    I love your willingness to discover and find a world in the blog sphere
    I’m enjoying it as well

    moondustwriter

    April 22, 2010 at 2:37 pm

    • Yes, a vital and interesting community!

      mairmusic

      April 22, 2010 at 2:50 pm

  9. Like how you construct this Villanelle.

    though not for lack of trying
    to unlock my door for spring

    repetition creating a series of closed doors—the questioning element seems a great complement to balancing the image. Thanks. Enjoyed it.

    dustus

    April 22, 2010 at 3:57 pm

    • Nice comment– it makes me see it through a new window (or door)!

      mairmusic

      April 22, 2010 at 4:16 pm

  10. very nicely done! Thanks for this!

    BFG

    April 22, 2010 at 5:08 pm

    • Thanks for reading!

      mairmusic

      April 22, 2010 at 9:26 pm

  11. Love this. Beautiful choice for the form.

    Jaymie

    April 22, 2010 at 9:13 pm

    • Thanks so much– I am still feeling my way around the villanelle.

      mairmusic

      April 22, 2010 at 9:22 pm


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