week 133 ~ a feather floating lightly

a feather floating lightly
on the breeze squint at the sun
this bright hour all I see

its beauty convincing me
I could be the lucky one
a feather floating lightly
down not caring what will be
waiting when the music’s done
this bright hour all I see

and the poignant melody
that holds time ransom as fun
a feather floating lightly
drifts for one moment maybe
longer who knows what’s begun
this bright hour all I see

and if it’s paradise we
aren’t asking for a reason
a feather floating lightly
this bright hour all I see

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Written by mairmusic

April 29, 2011 at 11:57 am

Posted in April, villanelle

Tagged with poetry

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The flow of the poem is like that feather moving on the space of the page.

slpmartin

April 29, 2011 at 1:48 pm

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- Interesting comment! I was trying to capture the feeling of our Easter, fleeting but forever.
  
  mairmusic
  
  April 29, 2011 at 11:16 pm
  
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Great photo and lovely, playful verses. Blessings…

Carol Ann Hoel

April 29, 2011 at 8:02 pm

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- Thanks, Carol– the villanelle is an interesting form.
  
  mairmusic
  
  April 29, 2011 at 11:10 pm
  
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” feather floating lightly
drifts for one moment maybe
longer who knows what’s begun”

oooh gosh, i do like this one, repetition, the melofy within it really all rather beautiful. like like like :) xx

glitteringsootonhereyelashes

April 30, 2011 at 10:52 am

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- Thanks– it’s fun to write in the villanelle form.
  
  mairmusic
  
  April 30, 2011 at 3:00 pm
  
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Great use of a tough form. (At least for me; I struggle with it!)
Congrats to my nearly namesake!

Danielle Mari

May 1, 2011 at 12:09 pm

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- Thanks, I love the transformative possibilities in the repeated-line forms. Funny coincidence w/ our names– maybe a slip of the pen in past lives.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 1, 2011 at 1:33 pm
  
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beautiful writing. :)

lunawitch15

May 1, 2011 at 10:31 pm

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- thanks!
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 10, 2011 at 2:35 pm
  
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The repitition creates such an entracing effect within these beautiful words…Breathtaking.

yelena m.

May 2, 2011 at 12:42 pm

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- Thanks, I’m quite a fan of the villanelle.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 10, 2011 at 2:41 pm
  
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feathers always intrigue me. a lovely poem.

trisha

May 2, 2011 at 12:43 pm

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- Thanks, Trisha– I am musing on the past for some reasons now.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 10, 2011 at 2:45 pm
  
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Wow. Gorgeous. I love what you do with the form.

lizbethsgarden

May 2, 2011 at 8:55 pm

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- Thanks for reading– sorry I lost this bunch of comments for so long.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 14, 2011 at 9:29 pm
  
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Thank you, that was wonderful. This was beauty “and the poignant melody that holds time ransom as fun a feather floating lightly”, though all was wonder to read.

RoughWaterJohn

May 2, 2011 at 11:39 pm

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- Thanks for your lovely comment.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 14, 2011 at 9:27 pm
  
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lovely..
you never fail to please.

A++

Jingle

May 3, 2011 at 1:16 pm

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- Thanks, Jingle!
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 14, 2011 at 9:26 pm
  
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very pretty and I like how the repeated line pulls it all together.

my potluck post
http://blackswanpoetry.wordpress.com/2011/05/01/poem-flexed/

swanrose

May 3, 2011 at 10:31 pm

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- Thanks– the villanelle is such an intriguing form.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 14, 2011 at 9:24 pm
  
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Joy in the moment. Beautifully written.

Jamie Dedes

May 13, 2011 at 10:02 am

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- Thanks, Jamie. It’s a difficult art to simply stay and not look back or forward. I try to learn.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 13, 2011 at 10:48 am
  
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wonderful capture of the simple beauty of a feather…very forrest gump…smiles.

brian

May 17, 2011 at 7:24 pm

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- hmm, so literal, my friend (:
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 17, 2011 at 7:38 pm
  
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Low the flow, the wafting feel of this piece. Nice.

Reflections

May 18, 2011 at 12:51 am

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- Thanks– it was describing the feelings of a particularly happy music day.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 18, 2011 at 9:32 am
  
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i like the image of the feather flowing lightly..

claudia

May 18, 2011 at 11:55 am

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- Cheerful, isn’t it!
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 18, 2011 at 1:02 pm
  
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Your poem has really captured the joy in the moment!

mindlovemisery

May 19, 2011 at 9:40 am

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- Yes it is fun to feel so positive, for a moment at least.
  
  mairmusic
  
  May 21, 2011 at 11:24 am
  
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What’s a sonnet?

A sonnet is a 14-line iambic pentameter poem with a unique and characteristic rhyme scheme. They have been written in Europe and England for centuries, and usually combine viewpoint and reflection in a personal yet universal way. I call mine blank-verse sonnets and try for a simple casual scan that observes yet obscures the form. Inspirations are the American sonnets of e. e. cummings and Edna "Vince" Millay.

What’s a villanelle?

A villanelle is an early French form with 19 lines using only 2 rhymes, traditionally broken into 6 verses. It's kind of obsessive, with lines 1 & 3 repeating alternately, the 4th time as lines 18 & 19. The lines can be any length, but don't seem to vary within a poem, and subjects include love, loss and challenge. Dylan Thomas, Elizabeth Bishop and Sylvia Plath all wrote them, and from the minute I typed villanelle in "Year 2 begins" I was itching to try it out because I've never written one. My first appear in Weeks 53 & 56. I've run some verses together, as many modern writers have done, for continuity and a cleaner line.

What’s a rondeau?

A rondeau is a form of medieval poetry that pre-dates the villanelle and also uses only 2 rhymes. The earliest come from an 8-line song form with 2 lines of music that repeat-- line 1 as 4 & 7, and line 2 as 8, rhyming the rest in a characteristic pattern. The result is a sturdy little poem that makes its point thoughtfully, and less obsessively than the villanelle, perhaps because the generating couplet is unrhymed, and the lines don't need to be the same length, just able to be sung or spoken in the same amount of time. The first ones appear in weeks 55 & 57. Sometimes the poetic form, sans music, is called a triolet.

What’s a decima?

A decima is an early 10-line Spanish poetic form, with a distinct break after the first 4. It uses an 8-syllable line and has an unusual but characteristic rhyme scheme. It's also a 19th-century form of improvised Cuban song so I thought it would work well in this blog format. My first appear in weeks 66 & 69.

What’s a pantoum?

A Malaysian form from the 15th century-- how exotic! It's a series of quatrains, w/ lines 2 & 4 repeating as lines 1 & 3 in the next. The last quatrain also uses lines 1 & 3 from the first quatrain, with the first line ending the poem. So every line is used twice. My first one is week 95.

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