week 106 ~ you heal like a burn
you heal like a burn
leaving a slight scar
that I had to learn
no cause for concern
it’s just how things are
you heal like a burn
as now I discern
your lies from afar
that I had to learn
betrayal don’t spurn
it scrape off the char
you heal like a burn
a bitter nocturne
played out on guitar
that I had to learn
the worst won’t return
I’ve made it this far
you heal like a burn
that I had to learn
Oh, yes. I have a few of those scars myself. As I read your words, I felt my mind reaching out to worry this one or that, remembering the lessons learned about reaching into the fire.
That’s a wonderful picture.
PattiKen
October 28, 2010 at 3:29 pm
Thanks! The pic is from our lovely Saturday celebration. I have been worrying this poem to death for a week now. I thought the first 2 lines were for a rondeau, but there wasn’t enough. So I made them longer and tried a decima, but it was too wordy. And then on Tuesday I tried a pantoum, because Leo had just mentioned he liked mine, but it wandered off into left field, and today I realized it was a villanelle. I’ve never had 2 lines searching so long for a form before!
mairmusic
October 28, 2010 at 10:13 pm
I would have no idea how to write any of those, but I do know one thing. It doesn’t pay to argue with the Muse. When you finally gave in, the result was terrific. I really liked it.
PattiKen
October 28, 2010 at 11:10 pm
True. When I was just writing sonnets it wasn’t a question. But now that I’ve expanded it’s interesting to see which ideas come with a form and which need some match-making.
mairmusic
October 28, 2010 at 11:28 pm
I like this very much…for I think it represents really how we heal when betrayed…that is so say there is always a scar even though the pain is gone…well said.
slpmartin
October 28, 2010 at 4:39 pm
Thanks. I wish I didn’t know that, but most of us do.
mairmusic
October 28, 2010 at 10:07 pm
I like the repetition in this. It carries the voice all the way through. Beautiful poem. Blessings to you…
Carol Ann Hoel
October 28, 2010 at 7:29 pm
Thanks– this seemed hard to do it with so I’m glad it worked.
mairmusic
October 28, 2010 at 10:06 pm
An ugly lesson to be learned, but as you noted, so many have. I like how it finally turned out Marilynn
Katherine
October 28, 2010 at 11:21 pm
The poem I’m happy with. Thanks. But the quandary less so.
mairmusic
October 28, 2010 at 11:30 pm
We all have those scars my darling girlfriend…but in the end, as long as we rise above that, we’re ok. We all had to learn…and still do!! I love your picture:) Mwah xoxox
buttercup600
October 28, 2010 at 11:37 pm
Yes, we are the brave ones. Thanks for your words.
mairmusic
October 28, 2010 at 11:41 pm
Excellent.
The repetitions were well placed and was good reading throughout
Artswebshow
October 29, 2010 at 6:08 am
Thanks– finally the initial 2 lines agreed to become a villanelle, a relief to me to find the right form.
mairmusic
October 29, 2010 at 10:00 am
This is great! especially like the Villanelles
woih
October 29, 2010 at 8:46 am
Thanks– it’s a v.cool form to be sure.
mairmusic
October 29, 2010 at 9:59 am
Nice form! And with such scars you don’t let the fire strike twice!
ana
October 29, 2010 at 1:05 pm
scars as armor– nice idea!
mairmusic
October 29, 2010 at 1:56 pm
just fabulous marilynn. i think when love dies in a relationship it leaves marks. for sure.
trisha
October 30, 2010 at 2:47 am
thanks for reading, trisha!
mairmusic
October 30, 2010 at 9:32 am
this was wonderful and surely very cathartic for you to write.
we always heal in time, but sometimes there is a reminder. for always.
Rene Foran
October 31, 2010 at 9:21 pm
yes we have all been through it.
mairmusic
October 31, 2010 at 10:32 pm
Nice! Loved the repetition and interesting pattern…
gospelwriter
October 31, 2010 at 9:32 pm
Thanks– the charming villanelle!
mairmusic
October 31, 2010 at 10:33 pm
A burn does leave a scar for sure, but it’s what we learn from it that matters (metaphorically speaking here) Nicely presented.
Melissa
October 31, 2010 at 9:35 pm
Thanks for your comment.
mairmusic
October 31, 2010 at 10:33 pm
Villanelle is not an easy form but you nailed it. Burns heal painfully and leave scars. Sometimes they need to be grafted. It takes courage to go through the recovery process. Great metaphor.
Victoria
My potluck is here:
http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/jingles-poetry-potluck-all-hallows-eve/
liv2write2day
October 31, 2010 at 10:01 pm
Thanks– I am learning the form; it’s intriguing!
mairmusic
October 31, 2010 at 10:34 pm
An apt description, great write!
A.B. Thomas
October 31, 2010 at 10:55 pm
Thanks for reading!
mairmusic
October 31, 2010 at 11:02 pm
These scars that we all have … Nice one! Here is mine http://scentofmyheart.wordpress.com/2010/10/31/pomona-of-our-century/
Scent of my heart
November 1, 2010 at 1:43 am
yes we do!
mairmusic
November 1, 2010 at 9:37 am
the worst won’t return
I’ve made it this far
you heal like a burn
that I had to learn
…
love all of your lines,
true,
we do learn from our past.
Jingle
November 1, 2010 at 9:18 am
Thanks, Jingle– we do.
mairmusic
November 1, 2010 at 9:37 am
hmmm- this is interesting- healing like a burn..
fiveloaf
November 1, 2010 at 10:26 am
Yes, I am still pondering the concept…
mairmusic
November 1, 2010 at 10:41 am
Nicely crafted Potluck entry.
Eric
November 1, 2010 at 11:49 am
Thanks for reading, Eric.
mairmusic
November 1, 2010 at 12:45 pm
Very well crafted. Boy I think somewhere along the way most of us have felt that way about someone else. Nice job!
Kristen Haskell
November 1, 2010 at 3:45 pm
thanks. yes, unfortunately, it’s universal.
mairmusic
November 1, 2010 at 6:49 pm
Beautiful poem with its repetivive words and rhyming end
umamaheswari anandane
November 2, 2010 at 12:46 pm
thanks for your input!
mairmusic
November 2, 2010 at 2:03 pm
This was good stuff, Marilynn! Sooo real!!
I really loved the last stanza… it was so positive and inspiring!
Keep it up, my dear friend… and thanks for linking this beautiful poem with poetry potluck!
Kavita
November 2, 2010 at 6:51 pm
Lovely to hear from you, my friend– I’ve missed your presence.
mairmusic
November 2, 2010 at 8:32 pm
This is touching. It reminded me of past heartaches. Unfortunately, I also have a couple of scars from “burn wounds”.
The Reason You Come
November 3, 2010 at 8:24 am
Ah, don’t we all… Thanks for reading.
mairmusic
November 3, 2010 at 8:52 am
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Thanks a lot for the support.
Happy November!
Your presence adds light to our space, keep shining!
xxx
Jingle
November 3, 2010 at 10:45 am
will try, J…
mairmusic
November 3, 2010 at 2:08 pm
Heal like a burn…
very raw…fantastic metaphor for emotional wounding!
Wonderful write…yet again!
lovelyannie79
November 3, 2010 at 10:46 am
Thank you my friend!
mairmusic
November 3, 2010 at 2:08 pm