week 87 ~ in the process of becoming
in the process of becoming
time wraps around and insulates
there isn’t room for everything
so follow your instincts running
hard when energy dissipates
in the process of becoming
progress is intoxicating
but fickle fortune seldom waits
there isn’t room for everything
so you should be the one asking
the questions he who hesitates
in the process of becoming
runs a real risk of forfeiting
rights to the story he narrates
there isn’t room for everything
in time the pendulum will swing
and you must choose which life awaits
in the process of becoming
there isn’t room for everything
there isn’t room for everything
in time the pendulum will swing
and you must choose which life awaits
in the process of becoming
there isn’t room for everything
true,
beautiful poem!
Jingle
June 17, 2010 at 10:45 am
thanks, Jingle!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 2:39 pm
I’m a fan of the way you write villanelles and found myself stuck pondering the lines…
“he who hesitates
in the process of becoming
runs a real risk of forfeiting
rights to the story he narrates”
—true and well phrased. thanks
dustus
June 17, 2010 at 11:33 am
thanks, Adam! I find the process of writing a villanelle fascinating. How much emphasis on the repeated lines is too much, is it possible to make them read two ways or run into another line to change the meaning. fun!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 2:38 pm
wow from the first line to the last a well written process..
D.S. Lear
June 17, 2010 at 1:08 pm
hey– thanks!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 2:36 pm
what a wicked flow you have created…i may need to give this a try…
brian
June 17, 2010 at 8:23 pm
thanks! the villanelle is the most seductive obsessive form– I am hooked!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 8:45 pm
“there isn’t time for everything” so true, the crossroads of life, the one the is just ahead for me,???now decisions soon, I will keep this in mind thanks, strong and tight I enjoyed it. alan
ncbeachcomber_asa
June 17, 2010 at 8:58 pm
good luck in your choices!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 9:56 pm
Great poem. I’m a fan of forms that repeat lines and I may just have to try a villanelle.
Morganna
June 17, 2010 at 8:59 pm
I highly recommend it!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 9:56 pm
“runs a real risk of forfeiting
rights to the story he narrates”
so much truth in this line….there is not time for hesitatation……cheers…..enjoy every moment..bkm
soulintention: signed .............bkm
June 17, 2010 at 9:15 pm
I’m trying to ;-)
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 10:00 pm
Such beautiful work…I’ll come back for more:)
buttercup600
June 17, 2010 at 9:20 pm
Thanks for reading!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 10:00 pm
he who hesitates
in the process of becoming
runs a real risk of forfeiting
rights to the story he narrates – WOW!!!!! This is fabulous, every single word and thought, love it!
suzicate
June 17, 2010 at 9:29 pm
Thanks! You’re my nominee for perfect this week!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 10:08 pm
sometimes one has to choose one life or the other. there is time to be and become everything. it’s like the metanarrative of one can’t have his cake and eat it too.
awesome poem. deep insight. write on!
Joe Suzz
June 17, 2010 at 9:51 pm
Thanks– you too!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 10:12 pm
I quite like your poems MM. You do wonders with this villanelle. The more I read, the more I think that I have to try the style as well.
Katherine
June 17, 2010 at 10:33 pm
I highly recommend trying it — lots of fun!
mairmusic
June 17, 2010 at 11:05 pm
I love this line:
‘but fickle fortune seldom waits’
A great poem, & I loved the image that goes with it!
thewritingant
June 17, 2010 at 11:39 pm
Thanks== appreciate you reading!
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 7:59 am
thank you for this! this is something i needed to hear! we def can’t do everything. a sobering reality!
lynnlivelaughlove
June 18, 2010 at 12:33 am
yeah, tho we try… thanks for reading!
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 7:59 am
I’m just beginning this Thursday Rally thing and have been reading lots of poems…This one gets me, and I get it. I really like it. Thanks
Just Say’n
tracyisjustsayn
June 18, 2010 at 1:11 am
Thanks, Tracy, and welcome!
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 8:00 am
thumbs up! :)
fiveloaf
June 18, 2010 at 5:06 am
Thanks 5!
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 8:00 am
In the process of becoming — I sense an urgency — a strong pulsing desire — powerfully written and riveting. enjoyed a darn good poem.
Joanny
Joanny
June 18, 2010 at 6:32 am
Please return favors to poets who were here,
Thank you in advance…
everyone needs encouragement…
Happy Friday!
;)
I sent this to everyone.
Jingle
June 18, 2010 at 7:25 am
I always do…
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 8:01 am
you have a rhythm that makes me want to hear your work out loud..as usual …outstanding!
unprecedentedintellectual
June 18, 2010 at 8:05 am
I do think of it out loud– interesting, Thanks for reading!
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 8:09 am
great form!! :)
i’m also starting a relationship with villanelles.
it’s very interesting how you broke this down, it reiterates the concept:
“in the process of becoming, there isn’t room for everything.”
Doni Cifra
June 18, 2010 at 5:38 pm
They’re pretty addicting! thanks for reading.
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 5:58 pm
Indeed, what very wise words speaking truth to the core. Becoming is also like making a choice of which direction you’d like to go in, for experience to prevail in your very existence.
Ana Goncalves
June 18, 2010 at 5:56 pm
Yes, there are intense decision points, and it’s not always certain where they will be set. Thanks for reading.
mairmusic
June 18, 2010 at 6:00 pm
this is the perfect poem. i think all of us writers relate exactly to what you are saying, but others would do well to heed your advice.
almondjoycie
June 19, 2010 at 4:32 am
Thanks– although I am just interpreting my own experiences I’m glad they communicate to you as well.
mairmusic
June 19, 2010 at 9:36 am
Wow, I just found your blog and what a find! I have to admit I’d never been a fan of villanelles until I read this poem. What’s interesting is that, because of their repetition, villanelles seem to take on a “stuck” or brooding quality, and yet your poem is about transformation and progress forward. It’s an interesting contrast and made me think about how the process of transformation can, quite ironically, trap us.
robot cupcake poetry
June 20, 2010 at 3:42 pm
I wrote my first one in October & I’m totally into that transformative aspect. Cool comment– thanks!
mairmusic
June 20, 2010 at 8:02 pm
You totally inspired this take on freedom and self exploration: http://robotcupcake.wordpress.com/2010/06/21/you-are-free/
robot cupcake poetry
June 20, 2010 at 4:23 pm
Nice poem– let’s stay in touch!
mairmusic
June 20, 2010 at 8:08 pm