week 85 ~ this moment reflects time and place
this moment reflects time and place
a hologram that can contain
all particulars that pertain
to my coordinates in space
but I won’t be here long the pace
of life pushes me down the road
and I try but it doesn’t bode
well for attempts to formulate
a self-portrait that I’m still wait-
ing for the future to upload
beautiful time and space poem..
have fun visiting…
thank you for the contribution!
Jingle
June 3, 2010 at 5:07 pm
thank YOU for the rally! It is an important part of my week.
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 6:11 pm
Beautiful, expressive piece of poetry.
Aalooran Rahman Bora
June 3, 2010 at 6:33 pm
thanks so much for reading!
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 6:48 pm
well penned, a lovely poem .keep shining.
wordwand
June 3, 2010 at 6:34 pm
Thank you, sir– likewise!
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 6:48 pm
love it mair, i love the way you write and that aspect of life being a hologram — that is now i see it, always changing color, always changing shape, hard to get coordinates in this space…with time flashing by not enough to create that self portrait we all want to finish of ourself ..lovely and thought worthy….
I see you are in Rio – my husband leaves tomorrow for Sao Paulo on business (second trip) — Read your Bio -your love of music and writing – very nice.
blessings….bkm
soulintention: signed .............bkm
June 3, 2010 at 6:54 pm
Thanks! Yes, life too often just races us past what we haven’t yet digested. Not in Rio at the moment, but often– I play music there. Lot of Rio pics on my music website. So much to love in Brasil, as I’m sure your husband agrees.
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 7:45 pm
Very beautiful indeed, and I can relate.
Everything at it’s moment.
Your writing is inspiring and keep sharing as you are shining. :)
Ana Goncalves
June 3, 2010 at 7:23 pm
Thanks for your lovely comment!
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 7:48 pm
how very melodious. love the imagery.
almondjoycie
June 3, 2010 at 7:47 pm
Thanks– just glimpses rushing past…
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 7:49 pm
i’m waiting for the future to upload too!! great piece,
enjoy the rally,
joe
Joe Suzz
June 3, 2010 at 8:14 pm
thanks– yep, those little circles keep spinning… :-)
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 8:21 pm
“my coordinates in space” the imagery in this line is so beautiful. I love your choice of words, I too am waiting for the future to upload and show me my portrait!
Batty
June 3, 2010 at 9:12 pm
V.cool! Thanks for reading!
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 9:32 pm
Isn’t it wild how fast life passes. Zoom!
I like your descriptions of the forms of poetry on your side bar. That helps and sometimes makes poems have more meaning. Lovely poem today. The rally is a favourite part of my week too. :)
Katherine
June 3, 2010 at 9:31 pm
Thanks for reading– I love the forms, it’s like opening a terrific present to write one.
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 9:35 pm
I like how you fit your words to the form. I hadn’t seen this form before, and I like it very much!
Morganna
June 3, 2010 at 10:05 pm
thanks! I’ve become quite addicted to the form– a bit lighter than a sonnet but a similar rhyme scheme.
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 10:19 pm
wow! i love the words..
fiveloaf
June 3, 2010 at 10:26 pm
Thanks– I appreciate the read!
mairmusic
June 3, 2010 at 10:42 pm
“Waiting for the future to upload.”
Me too. Awesome poem!
Kelsey
June 4, 2010 at 1:19 am
thanks, Kelsey!
mairmusic
June 4, 2010 at 7:21 am
i love the rhyming ;)
oinky
June 4, 2010 at 7:20 am
Rhymes are my great delight– I love the old forms! Thanks fr reading.
mairmusic
June 4, 2010 at 7:23 am
Best wishes on your book. Yes, our journey into the future is a fun mystery yet to unfold. Loved this poem. Heartspell
heartspell
June 4, 2010 at 10:47 am
thanks so much– for reading & luck!
mairmusic
June 4, 2010 at 11:04 am
very nice… I like how you wrap it up.
BFG
June 4, 2010 at 2:04 pm
thanks– it was a circumstantial inspiration. :-
mairmusic
June 4, 2010 at 3:00 pm
This is just awesome. so complex yet so simple to understand.
it was a wonderful work.
trisha
June 4, 2010 at 4:29 pm
Thanks for reading!
mairmusic
June 4, 2010 at 4:52 pm
Hi!
nice words there..expressing truth nicely done…
pravin nair
June 4, 2010 at 4:30 pm
Appreciate you reading!
mairmusic
June 4, 2010 at 4:52 pm
Beautifully written. It has such a great rhythm to it.And a perfect ending: “waiting for the future to upload.” Great!!
Michele Spector
June 5, 2010 at 3:34 pm
Thanks, Michelle! It was actually art imitating life…
mairmusic
June 5, 2010 at 3:38 pm
Your poem begins on a grand scale and weaves successive lines in which I find, optimistically, the formulation of a portrait in progress. Also like the multiple frames in the photo.
dutus
June 6, 2010 at 10:55 am
Thanks, Adam! Yes, the portrait is always being formed, sometimes in surprising ways.
mairmusic
June 6, 2010 at 10:58 am
life is a journey of constant self improvement. we should like our present canvas but should not be smug with it.
trisha
October 18, 2010 at 2:29 am
What an interesting way to put it, Trisha!
mairmusic
October 18, 2010 at 9:17 am